Anna Graham

Hey there, Dreamworx! This is some great stuff! Let's see if I can find anything to fix... Well, it's a nitpick, but it'll do: “I have been running for my ...

Hey there, KJ! This is yet another brilliant addition to your story! I agree with the others, it was nice to have a chance to get comfortable in our chairs ...

Hey there, KJ! Once more, you've written an intense chapter. It makes me wonder... who reported Will? Was it a different female student, or Becca that he got in trouble ...

:D Hey again, KJ! I don't think I've mentioned this, but I like how you're alternating chapters between past and present. It's wicked knowing each story bit by bit. Again, ...

:D Ditto to what the others said. I'm veeery curious... *rubs chin thoughtfully* Oh, and here's a little thing: “Glad to here it,” I do believe she's hearing it, actually. ...

Hey again! She ignored me for so long that I wondered if she knew I was still here. I do believe you're missing "me" in that sentence. Bread, cheese, water, ...

Hey there, Dreamworx! It's so weird, I'm pretty sure I commented on this one. It must not have worked. Weird. Anywho, I loved this chapter! Am I right in supposing ...

*Applause* I loved this chapter! You're great at creative dialogue, and you manage to keep it realistic, too! Vick is my hero! He's got so much character; you are a ...

Hey there, KJ! Sorry it's been a while! I was so excited when I found out you added a chapter! I love this story! The others caught some little things ...

Hey again! I really enjoyed this chapter! The confusion, the hangover, the vengeful mob leader--i can't wait to read the next one! I really like Dewey too. He's not exactly ...

Hey there, Dreamworx! First of all, it's amazing how much this story has progressed from the very first chapter! Already it's sounding more natural, and your descriptions are beautiful. The ...

So pretty much I'm uber excited! I searched all over your piece, taking it apart for something I could review on. Here's a maybe: Vick’s fingers moved deftly and surprisingly ...

Hey, KJ! This is so intense, I'm shaking. I'm not even kidding you. You're doing extremely well describing her uncertainy, and his fondness for Becca. Your words flow so well, ...

I'm just going to jump right in, because I'm excited! “Thanks , ” replied Tom, handing the air rifle to his friend. A comma instead of a period here, since ...

I gotta, say this is great stuff! You organize your thoughts really well, not rushing through important descriptions. Here are some things I noticed: "Then , not a moment later ...